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10 Tips for Writing Science Fiction
10 Tips for Writing Science Fiction
Anybody Can Write a Novel 2.0
Chapter 2 “Genres” – Section 4 “Sci-fi”
“Science fiction has a way of letting you talk about where we are in the world and letting you be a bit of a pop philosopher without being didactic.” -Brit Marling

Today, we are going to talk about the grand and inclusive genre of science fiction. But as we continue to move along in these tutorials about genres, I feel there is something important to point out. Nearly all of the suggestions that I make are universal and can be applied to all other genres. I go into each tutorial, with the intention of applying the tips best suited to that particular genre; but that doesn't mean that any of them are exclusive. Additionally,
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13 Tips for Teaching Others to Write
13 Tips for Teaching Others to Write
Anybody Can Write a Novel 2.0
Chapter 10 “The Writing Life” – Section 6 “Teaching”
The one exclusive sign of thorough knowledge is the power of teaching.
Learning a craft, starting from nothing, can be a complex challenge that requires complex solutions. In college, I found that I was unable to recall information well enough to get the grades I wanted. Fortunately, it was around that time that I was invited to a study group with other students who were not getting the best of grades. Upon reading with them, sharing notes, and trying to grasp the concepts we were challenged with, I learned that each of us had a slight advantage at learning certain concepts; so we used our personal strengths to explain
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4 Tips for Loving Your Stories
 4 Tips for Loving Your Stories
Anybody Can Write a Novel 2.0
Chapter 10 “The Writing Life” – Section 5 “Love of Craft”
“Tell me all your stories, tell me all the feelings about your stories. And I'll compassionately accept you, your feelings, and your stories.” - JP Sears (On how to speak to ourselves)
One of the biggest dangers that I've discovered in the writing craft is in defining one's self-worth from it. With stories, writing, or art being so integral to our lives, it is hard not to let it singularly define us instead of letting it be healthy part of us. As a result, we judge ourselves based on warped standards for writing that come from other writers, from critics, or even from ourselves. For me, this becomes a particular
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Writing Tips - How to Write Child Characters
Like most writers, there are many similarities and patterns that emerge across my stories. Some of it is author appeal - going into great details about locales, for instance. I’ve really come to like describing places, and clothing for some reason. Some of it is style. And some of it I’m probably doing unconsciously. It isn’t exactly a bad thing, although I am aware that if I don’t reel some of these things in at a certain point, they can get old and tired. However, one thing that crosses almost all of my works is that most of my characters are children.
I don’t want to toot my own horn or anything, but I think that I write children very well. At the very least, it’s what most people seemed to want me to do a writing tips on. And since this series had been on a hiatus for way too long, I thought that I’d take this one on. Because writing children… is a very easy thing to screw up.
Most writers are adults, and a lot of people have forgotte
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Anybody Can Write a Novel - Outline
Anybody Can Write A Novel - Outline
A Step-by-step Guide for Anyone to Learn How to Write a Novel

This is an Outline of all my current articles, and a look at what is to come. I will try to update it, at least once every two weeks. Also note that just because something is absent from the Outline does not mean I don't plan to write it. This is a compilation of only chapters that have already been written.
(You'll notice that I have neglected some points and chapters within this Outline. This this is simply a result of realizing that there is so much to learn, when it comes to writing. Don't worry, I'll be sure to come back and fill in the gaps. Also, if this list inspires any requested topics that you would like me to address, please feel free to suggest them in the comments section.)

Chapter 1– Beginning to Write
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Writing Tips - Practice
Writing Tips - Practice
Recently I’ve asked a particular question. When I ask how to get good at drawing, people tell me to practice. So, I’ve posed the question “how do I practice.” And people have been kind enough to point me in the right direction. However, some people said that they had the exact same problem when it came to writing - that they were told to “practice” and they didn’t really know how. So, fair is fair. And let’s talk about some methods and techniques that will help you practice. I’ll tell you a few methods and exercises, and I’ll tell you what they’re meant to do.
First of all, let’s get the general idea of what “practice” stories are. Something I want you to put firmly in your mind is that whatever you come up with, no one will ever have to see. You don’t have to show it to anyone. Most guides of “how to practice writing” have one simple goal: get you to write more
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Writing Tips - Blank Page Syndrome
So you've got your novel or whatever all plotted out. You know what's going to happen each second of the way through. You know all of your main characters to the point of having written a full biography on each of them, including the waiter in chapter 3 who has like two lines of dialogue. You've got your favorite writing music playing on repeat. You've opened up a Word or Google Doc, your fingers ready to go. And yet... you just can't get started. You have no idea where to begin, and anything you try to type just feels weird and awkward. Such is the case of Blank Page Syndrome. The absolute hardest part of writing is getting started, and getting over this. It's not quite writer's block... you know what you want to do, and you could write another story if you want to, but you just can't start this particular novel. And you love this work you're about to begin on. You've been thinking about it so much that proofreading your last work has been a pain in the ass because this new idea keeps
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What is Art? Blake's thoughts on the Matter
What is Art?
Blake's thoughts on the Matter
I often come across internet forums and people in general discussing the definition of art. It seems that these people tend to fall into two camps. On the one hand, you have people who thinks that anything that the artist defines as art is art. Artists in this camp—like Marcel Duchamp with his urinals that he found, did not build and claimed were art—seem to think that the art is special because the artist is special. And because the artist, with his or her special eye, thinks it is special it becomes so. In their definition, art is a sort title—like a knighthood, bestowed by the royal artist.
The second camp of people in this argument believe that the “specialness” does not come from the artist but from the virtue of the work itself. Just like with Michelangelo's Sistine Chapel and its undeniable beauty, this school of thought holds that there must be some objective quality within the work, which makes it signif
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Writing Tips - How to Do a Multi-Genre Show
Recommended by Christopher from patreon, and my first patreon request.
Christopher gave me a few options and the one of them that gravitated towards me the most was how to do a multi-genre show. He gave me the example of Futurama, which blended comedy and science fiction. It’s actually a really fascinating idea that I wish more shows would take on.
A good place to start would be with a list of genres, and generally what they contain:
Action: shows that feature desperate situations like explosions, car chases, fist fights, undermining terrorists, and the like. Spy movies would be an example of a subgenre here, as would superhero movies. An action television show would be Burn Notice
Adventure: The protagonists travel to distant places, ala Around the World in 80 Days. The main focus of the story is the travel, and it does not have to focus on realistic locations. It’s usually combined with the action genre. Avatar: The Last Airbender is an (action) adven
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Writing Tips - Creating Civilizations (Part I)
Or alternatively, I explain my fantasy generator game from awhile back. Today we’re going to talk about how you can create a civilization/society for your fantasy or science fiction world. There will be another part to this though, and in that one I’ll be telling you how to create a society/civilization integral to the theme of your novel. Think of the first parts as creating something like The Shire, and the final ones about creating something like Oceania from 1984.
The main difference is that from there, we start with the “end” - we figure out what we want for the story, and we build things that come from a specific conclusion. In 1984 the civilization is there to prove that totalitarianism is bad. In this one, we start from the beginning. We figure out a society’s assets and we build it to a logical conclusion. It helps make societies more… realistic.
Although, it might be wise for you to pick a certain conclusion, even when
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7 Tips for Writing Your Story's Beginning

7 Tips for Writing Your Story's Beginning

Anybody Can Write a Novel 2.0

Chapter 6 “Plot Points” – Section 1 “The Beginning”

"Don't you know that the beginning is the most important part of every work [...] For at that stage it's most plastic, and each thing assimilates itself to the model whose stamp anyone wishes to give to it."
When you speak to many writers, editors, and publishers about the topic of prologues, they will generally give you the same piece of advice—skip it. The reason is that even in the rare cases
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How to Write a First Draft Without Perfectionism
Maybe you’ve heard that first drafts are supposed to suck, but what does that really mean? What does a sucky first draft look like? How do you allow yourself to suck? Why would you even want to allow yourself to write something that sucks in the first place?
Because otherwise, you’ll most likely be crippled by the writer’s arch nemesis: perfectionism.
Did you just cringe? We all experience it when we sit down to write, arrange everything just so, type a sentence or two (or a bit more if you’re lucky), and then it strikes—your inner editor. It smacks you across the face and demands that you fix that grammar mistake right now. 
Or worse, you’ve written multiple chapters of your epic novel when you suddenly get a great idea for a new direction to take the story that will make it so much better! But you can’t just keep writing as if you’d written in that awesome new idea from the beginning. No, your inner editor screams at
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Writing Tips: Beginner's Guide to Avoiding Cliches
One of the biggest questions I tend to get from writers is how to avoid making their work cliche. I can't give you an upfront answer to that because the answer depends largely on what you're doing and how you're doing it. And let me start by saying this: the greatest writer on earth can make any cliche work. Think about it: How to Train Your Dragon isn't exactly an original movie by any stretch, but it's outstanding because of the way that it uses the tropes that have dragged down other similar movies in horrible ways. The best way to figure out what would be cliche is to read a ton of whatever is in your genre/plot type (and by "read" I mean read books, comic books, manuals, RPG guide books, watch television shows and movies, listen to music etc).
For example, if you're I dunno, writing a series about kids ruling the world or making their own rules you're going to check out a lot in that medium. You'll soon figure out that most of them are crapsack dystopias and figure out that the ar
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The Periodic Table of Storytelling, Second Edition by DawnPaladin The Periodic Table of Storytelling, Second Edition :icondawnpaladin:DawnPaladin 354 31



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Blaine Bradshaw
Artist | Professional | Literature
United States
I am Blaine Bradshaw, and I have been captivated by stories all my life. Whether it be on screen, in books, or in graphic novels I enjoy all mediums of storytelling. While viewing the works of aspiring authors I noticed the biggest hurtle many people face is in the development of their story, and that they are able to present a more rounded piece of work with very little change to their original idea. I created my own editing business to provide the guidance to make good ideas into great stories.


Plot Premise: The story is about a protagonist named Brav who was a child soldier in training with two competing allied factions until one day enemy combatants appear in what should have been a safe training area. In reaction Brav's wanted to fight the enemy, but his efforts were impeded by his anger getting the better of him. Brav feels like the he has to survive the situation no matter what.

List of Characters (That matter)

Brav- Primary Protagonist- In the distant future lives a boy name Victor Bravery who is a child soldier in training and Provius Prospect and lives on a military installation. One day Brav receives orders to go to scout training where he comes face to face with the Red Crusaders. In reaction, Brav wants to kill them, however Brav's efforts are impeded by the instructor, unknown cyborg forces, and the enemy assassin the enemy is trying to get through the forest. Which he feels he needs to overcome.
1: Brav has been training for combat his entire life. All his time has been training his body physically and his mind tactically. He is emotionally stunted as he suffers from repressed grief over the loss of his parents and has issues with authority from growing up in a very strict environment. He does little things to establish his individuality even within the two structures that have made up his entire life.
2: Brav comes the part of me that was torn between my faith and my service. The two structures of my life.
3: I am an idiosyncratic personality that most closely resembles a resilient personality tolerating an artistic personality, while Brav is a loner personality packing a lot of repressed grief.
5: He wants the Uman Crusaders dead. They killed his parents so pretty bad.
6: Emotional control issues his biggest flaw. Essentially he's a ticking time bomb with few ties to humanity anymore. He is not the best shot, and he tends to act before thinking. He doesn't think about the bigger picture.
7: Violence is the force that brings out his anger. Uman's especially, but other people have been on the receiving end of his anger before.

Katie- Secondary Protagonist/ Foil: who was the daughter of the chief. One day Katie got a report that her friend Bravery was getting shipped off to scout training. In reaction she decided get her dad involved, but he is unable to do anything. Which she feels she needs to overcome.
1: She is the friend most of us wish we had. While destined to be the Chief after her father dies she is down to earth, and opposite of Brav's martial prowess and upbringing.
2: She is represents the side of me that pursues what is just. To her there is a justice or fairness that needs to be pursued.
3: She is a woman for starters, but the main difference is that she is political about getting things done where I just put shovel to earth. She is much kinder than I, and where she would hesitate I move.
5: The thing she wants most of all is for Brav to live with her and her dad again like they used to. To complete what she feels is home.
6: She is uncertain, and physically weak. She relies on others to accomplish or accommodate her.
7: Brav the main protagonist could manipulate her the most.
12 point outline:
Beginning: She used to live with Brav and his parents with her Dad in the palace and it was the best days of her life.
The Inciting Incident: Uman Shock Troopers attacked the palace and killed Brav's parents and she was separated from Brav and her Dad for security reasons.
The First Turning point: Brav is sent away and she wants to get him back with her Dad like they used to.
The Rising Action: She gets immersed in her studies focusing on politics, debate, and political intrigue. Her plan is to shut down EBTAP to get Brav back.
The First Pinch Point: EBTAP send Brav off to train in the woods really far away.
Midpoint: she tries to get her father to stop EBTAP so she doesn't have to
The Disaster: She tries unsuccessfully to order the stopping of EBTAP using her father's seal.
The Second Pinch Point: Brav is injured fighting Umans when he is not even old enough to be in the Army in the first place.
The Second Turning Point: Brav tells her about his injury and it made her realize that the EBTAP kids were dying in there and it motivated her to get the program shut down by other means.
The Stand Up: She started a campaign to raise awareness for the EBTAP child soldiers and since she was doing it outside the government her father was able to lend his support to the cause and legislatures started getting pressured to change the law on EBTAP.
The Climax: The legislature makes new laws concerning the war orphans and it stops placing kids into the program and sent any of the children under a certain age to foster families and adoption agencies.
The Epilogue: Brav stays in the service anyway. He can't abandon those left behind, and she tries to think of new ways to free the others.

Ferro- supporting character/ Foil: who is the friend of Bravery and another child soldier in training and lived on a military installation. One day Ferro receives orders to go to scout training where he comes face to face with enemy combatants and his first glimpse of Provius in action. In reaction, Ferro decides to fight, however he gets captured by cyborgs.

Sgt. Matthews- Specter- Supporting Character: who is the head scouting instructor at Camp Shadow. One day he receives orders to evacuate the area, leaving hundreds of civilians to die from a surprise enemy advance. In reaction he tries to use the adults to fight the majority of the fight, but is impeded by the Provius who out rank him. He feels he needs to follow orders as much as possible.

Sir. Unyielding- supporting characters: who is a senior Provius member who lives on the road. One day he receives  an intelligence report that he thinks shows enemy movement in a less monitored area. In reaction, he requests a unit be sent to plug the gap in the defenses, but is impeded by central command who won't give him what he wants. He feels he needs to fight the enemy anyway.

Sir. Patience- supporting character: who is a Provius member from the Ghost Family who judges Gabriel's Wall and lives on the road. One day she gets a request to gather as many of her fellow Ghosts to meet up with Sir. Unyielding to stop the Red Crusaders in the foothills of Gabriel's Wall. In reaction she answers the call, and is impeded by the enemy combatants. She feels she needs to help stop the Red Crusaders from pushing north.

Initiate Blakely- supporting character/foil: who is a Provius in training with the Bladesmith Family and lives with Sir. Unyielding his mentor. One day his mentor gives him orders to go with him to fight the Red Crusaders. In reaction he does what he is ordered to do, and is impeded by enemy combatants. He feels he needs to fight the enemy.

1st Sgt. Crusher- secondary antagonist: who is a Red Crusader Sgt. and lives on an Forward Operating Base on the DMZ. One day he gets orders to take his company and escort an assassin through enemy lines so he can try to eliminate a high priority target. In reaction he follows orders, and is impeded by the scouts in training and the Provius. He feels he needs to complete his mission or lose face with his men and with the Uman community.

John Smith- secondary antagonist: who is an assassin for the Uman forces. One day he receives orders to try and kill the Chieftain of Prosperity Valley. In reaction he follows his orders, but is impeded by the Provius. He feels the need to kill as many people as possible even if he never gets to his target.

The Queen- secondary antagonist: who is the biomechanical body that acts as the mouthpiece of the collective hive of the unnamed cyborg faction. One day the sensors outside their compound get triggered by a group of humans. In reaction she activates the physical bodies of the cyborgs to capture as many as possible, but is impeded by the humans fighting back. She has no feelings about it one way or the other, but it is advantageous to capture or kill as many as possible.
Provius Narrator
Third Person, Limited Narrator, Head-hopper, Past tense, Non-presence, Trustworthy, 1
GreenBat Tutorials Workshop Task #2 Part B
Here is my basic map. It is mostly topographical with the main locations that I need to know.

Part A:…
Workshop Task #2 Part A

Constructing a Timeline:
     Since I am writing sci-fi in our own universe with reality as a basis I will not be starting at the beginning of time, just where this timeline diverts from reality.

2087 +70 yrs       Weapons development begins creating a non-nuclear warhead called a Displacer. The Displacer burrows under the ground and explodes with such great force everything on the surface pushes up and away completely altering the landscape.

2099 +12 yrs      New arms race begins as Displacer technology advances to a capability of disrupting the entire state of Connecticut with one warhead.

2118 +19yrs      Large scale war breaks out after petty fighting in smaller countries brings allied superpowers into conflict. Displacers now theoretically powerful enough to take out half of Australia though only a few of that magnitude exist.

2121 January 03 +3 yrs      First Displacer used at the battle of Luxor destroying the city and diverting the Nile to the Red Sea. 2 million die.

2121 May 27 0546 Zulu      Fire sale hack strikes Azerbaijan military control system and launched their entire arsenal at the world's superpowers whose automated responses fired all displacers worldwide.
2121 May 27 0634      The entire surface of the earth destroyed. 11 billion dead. Dust blocked out the sun. Survivors huddled in bomb shelters deep in the earth as their tunnels to the surface were buried. Estimated survivors- 18,000 worldwide.

2122 December 03      First shelter drilled its way to the surface and people once again set foot on the changed landscape. A new age began those few who recorded it noted they began counting time anew at the start of the next year. Survivors- 15,367

0 SD(Survived Displacers) January 01 0001      Saint Perseverance Moses Priest is the first child born on the new surface. 2 more shelters surface. People dig up supplies and tools from whatever was closest to the surface.

25 SD      7 Shelters converged at one place and form the Town of Providence. Saint Priest voted as mayor.

41 SD      Saint Priest convinced Providence to adopt Christian theocracy and ruled as Bishop. Expeditions were sent to map the new world.

54 SD      Saint Priest dies and is entombed. Pop. ~30,000 world wide

     Dissatisfaction with the following Bishops cause mass exodus from Providence. Settlements spread across the continent, and other surviving shelters were discovered. Over the next century as populations grew, violent crime became more common. Roving bands of brigands attacked small settlements and travelers. Anyone with a group of loyal followers could establish their own little kingdom, and law could only be enforced as far as one had power to do so.

376 June 03      Seven large clans form the Provius to standardize law across the known continents. The Provius were wandering judges who dispensed justice based on a simple law and resolved disputes in areas without law. This movement along with as strong church presence stunted civil organization as the judges provided enough protection to keep people from needing to form larger governments. Local rulers left the judicial and criminal legislation up to the Provius and only employed enforcers to detain people for the Provius to make a judgment.

500      On the 500th anniversary of the rise from the shelters the Provius met together and formed a council to better judge the lands of the continent. Few Provius had gone west over the mountains, so at the first council the Bladesmiths volunteered to move the entire family over the mountain.

543 May 20      Code of Diligence accepted by Bladesmith Family- Diligence Bladesmith Daughter of Jonathan Bowman created the code after the Provius expansion into the western part of the continent occurred. Pop. ~100 million.

704      Bladesmiths assist with forming the Council of Prosperity to govern all of Prosperity Valley in the western part of the continent.

1141      Night of Mourning. Uman Crusaders invade Prosperity Valley. Multi pronged attack. Missiles fired on skyscrapers, viruses sent through computer systems infecting bionic limbs, automated droids, and AI infused robots causing everything to go berserk. 1.2 million dead. This event started a war that continued for generations.

1224 June 4      Bravery Henry Bladesmith (protagonist) is born to Sir Diligent Wallace Bladesmith and Kendra Li Bladesmith(Lorisson) as the fifth generation in the war.

1229 August 26      Bravery's parents killed in an attack and Bravery forced into EBTAP at age 5.
GreenBat Tutorial Workshop Task #2 Part A
There is some parts that are direct reference to a hyper religious past leading up to the story starting, but I felt it was important to include since they are the basis for several cultural keys that are included in the story.

Part B:…
GreenBat-Tutorials Workshop Task #1


   Hello my name is Blaine and I am the Owner/ Editor in Chief for Superior Story, a literary editing and consulting business. Mr. Parker mentioned that he was looking for a few more pairs of eyes to help evaluate work being submitted, so I have volunteered to join the fray. I will also be completing many of the tasks along with everyone so we can work together and have fun.
   I have been writing since 2003 and editing for over three years now. I became a writer by accident. I never set out to become one when I started, and I wasn't even a hobbyist until my high school freshmen English teacher gave us an assignment to write something for sixty pages. I had never really enjoyed writing before that, and I started off rather begrudgingly. Somewhere in those sixty pages I found that I really enjoyed created worlds from nothing, and I was hooked.
   What I always hope to accomplish in my writing now is to use words like a painter uses color to pull readers into my world, use structure and cadence to express emotion like a musician, and control time to distill the essence of an epic into something that can be read in a day. I intend to tell a story from the start to the end and I try to make it enjoyable, or not depending. I tend towards a minimalist style, though I leave room for the occasional eloquence depending on how I feel the narrator functions within a story. At the end of the day I want to write something that I would want to read, and makes other people feel something.

My Novel

   What I am working on for the workshop will be a Sci-Fi piece of moderate to heavy intensity and medium tone. The primary conflict(PC) is the protagonist against society. (man vs society) Secondary conflict(SC) is the protagonist against a physical enemy. (man vs man) What I'm trying to accomplish is the expression of my experiences in the military as a person with conflicting values of the society that surrounded me and others that I know who were the same as myself. I want to condense attitudes and emotions from the collision of cultures within a military framework into the protagonist. I am intending for the story to be a comedy, but a bitter one.

Chapter Rewrite

   The follow excerpt is from Orson Scott Card's Ender's Game, originally published by Tom Doherty Associates LLC in January 1985. My edition was printed in July 1994. This excerpt is copied for educational purposes and allowed under Title 17 Section 107 of the Fair Use Act.

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   Ender didn't wave when she walked down the hill toward him, didn't smile when she stepped onto the floating boat slip. But she knew that he was glad to see her, knew it because of the way his eyes never left her face.
   "You're bigger than I remember." she said stupidly.
   "You too," he said. "I also remembered that you were beautiful."
   "Memory does play tricks on us."
   "No. Your face is the same, but I don't remember what beautiful means anymore. Come on. Let's go out into the lake."
   She looked at the small raft with misgivings.
   "Don't stand up on it, that's all," he said. He got on by crawling, spiderlike, on toes and fingers. "It's the first thing I built with my own hands since you and I used to build with blocks. Peter-proof buildings."
   She laughed. They used to take pleasure in building things that would stand up even when a lot of the obvious supports had been removed. Peter, in turn, liked to remove a block here or there, so the structure would be fragile enough that the next person to touch it would knock it down. Peter was an ass, but he did provide some focus to their childhood.
   "Peter's changed," she said.
   "Let's not talk about him," said Ender.
   "All right."

* * *

   Mr. Card was showing a weary Ender who needed to connect with humanity again after the stresses of his previous training. He created an awkward back and forth as if these two have nothing in common anymore, and utilized non-standard sentence structures, which helped convey both the awkwardness of the conversation, but also the lack of passion on Ender's part. I always thought Ender would be a bit more resilient than what is portrayed and that he would be more forth coming with his sister who he always loved. I altered the scene to make it seem more conspiratorial between them as it was when they were younger because sometimes you can just fall right back in where you left off with some family members.

   Ender didn't wave when she walked down the hill toward him, didn't smile when she stepped onto the floating boat slip. But she knew that he was glad to see her, knew it because of the way his eyes never left her face.
   "You're bigger than I remember." she said stupidly.
   "You too," he said while tapping the dock where he had drawn on the boards with water. A simple code from before he left for Battle School. Someone was listening.
   "Memory does play tricks on us," she tried carrying on the conversation as Ender splashed water over the dock erasing the message.
   "No. We just got older. Come on. Let's go out into the lake."
   She looked at the small raft with misgivings.
   "Don't stand up on it, that's all," he said. He got on by crawling, spiderlike, on toes and fingers. "It's the first thing I built with my own hands since you and I used to build with blocks. Peter-proof buildings."
   She laughed. They used to take pleasure in building things that would stand up even when a lot of the obvious supports had been removed. Peter, in turn, liked to remove a block here or there, so the structure would be fragile enough that the next person to touch it would knock it down. Peter was an ass, but he did provide some focus to their childhood.
   "Peter's changed," she said.
   "Let's not talk about him," said Ender holding his finger to his lips.
   "All right."
If you are religiously typing out your 1,667 words every day you should be at 6,668 by the end of today.  Myself on the other hand I don't roll that way.  Never have I ever been able to just sit down and write a rough draft without some thinking ahead of time.  The few times I tried, it yielded such a mess that it wasn't worth trying to change what was written, and I painstakingly had to rewrite the entire piece.  So over the course of the twelve years I have been writing, I have found the best way for myself to start any project. I end up behind on words at first but there is a lot less to fix in the next draft.


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Crimson-Kaizer Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
I honestly don't know how to begin this. I guess I should start by thanking you for taking time to critique my story. I do appreciate that. 

The next thing I should ask is how do flow charts work. Because I honestly have no idea what they are...and even if I did, I do not think it would help me much.

I am the type of person who writes mostly on impulse. If I get an idea I like, I have to write it that that moment. Out of fear I will lose it later. As you can assume, this doesn't create a lot of room for further development of certain things with in the story itself.

Third, is the answer I gave you in the comments section. After taking a second glance at it, I have come to the conclusion that it is indeed more of a graphic novel then as oppose to a regular novel.  

I enjoyed writing this, and I want to write more...even if I'm not good at it. Writing makes me happy, but at the same time, I want to be good at it. I did find your critique to be somewhat harsh, I'll admit that(though, it may have been because the points you made were correct.) But, If it can help me improve, then so be it. 

Fourth is how would I go about writing a graphic novel? Is it the same as writing a non-graphic novel? Do you know of any sites that could possibility aid me in writing a graphic novel or offer any advice? 

I do want to thank you again for your critique, and any help you chose to offer. I hope the next time you read something I produce, you will find it much more entertaining.

Have a nice night. :iconbowplz:
SuperiorStory Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2015  Professional Writer
I did enjoy the ideas of your story, and as a base it is entertaining, and if you ask me if I like it I do, but to accurately critique it I need to point out any areas that are weak or technically improper. That is essentially the purpose of a critique.
In regard to writing on impulse, there is nothing wrong with writing on impulse. This is just a good example of why you always want to revise your own work one or two times to make sure the impulse gets polished. No one writes well in their rough draft, but it is the revision that makes it into a better piece of writing.
To write a graphic novel you actually write it using a screen play format. The difference is where internal thoughts are seldom ever used in screen plays in graphic novels you can include thoughts.
The flow chart can work however you want it to, but the main goal is to have a line that has the events you want to happen written with a clear goal of where the story is going and how you want to get there. This helps you stay on track but it can be changed if you find the characters won't go the way you thought when you started.

I hope this helps
Crimson-Kaizer Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
It does. Thank you.
Silkienne Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2015   Writer
Blaine of Superior Story read the first 20,000 words of a high, heroic fantasy manuscript.  The first chapter had been edited and the remainder was in a very rough, passive voice, get the story on paper leve of prose.  We spoke on the phone, discussed where I envision the story to go, and how to make the story stronger.

I must say, I was a little taken aback by his recommendations.  He liked the story, but he thought I needed to be a little more connected to one main protagonist and do as much of the story telling through her eyes as I could.  He went on to say that if I simply tweak this part or that part, it would be stronger in the new, resequenced version.

I cannot argue with his assessment.  I wanted to strengthen the first third of the book and new I needed fresh eyes.  The changes will be more than simple tweaks to reorder most of the 100,000 word manuscript.  But, the story is worth telling.  The advice he gave me has been good, sound advice directed at my story without giving me a simple copy edit and saying nothing about craft!  Having reworked the entire outline, cut the point of view scenes from a couple of characters (these scenes will be told by my primary protagonist), I think I might be ready to begin the rewrite.  

If you want an honesty critique on your story, your voice, and a look at your crafting skills so your voice shines and the story captivates your audience, Blaine can help you get there.  I highly recommend him and plan to use him again!  

Thank you Blaine for all of your hard work and keen insight.
SuperiorStory Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2015  Professional Writer
Thank you so much I really appreciate it.
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